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 Among the similarities between   Garry Winogrand’s  and Gregory Crewdson’s photography we can mention, that both of them are showing people’s natures in their societies through the eyes of the photographer. Each picture and its story and concept is incomplete. (good) They both describe how some people have different concepts of how we view others. (this is too vague. can you narrow it down?) Details (details such as ______, ______ and ________) refer to the place and meaning (place is a way of informing meaning. Place and meaning are not on the same level) of the image. Both photographs reveal the challenge of human contact (? What does this mean? I am lost here) and show how people are disconnected. (good)

     The main difference between this photograph is the creative approach of the photographer.  Winogrand’s approach is documenting reality, and Crewdson constructs him images. (good) The images also differ on a dedicative (? What is being dedicated here, and to whom?) level. One image is of a densely populated city and and lighteing looks like it’s in the morning, the other image is of a suburban quiet American street.  The image by Winograd shows the sharp look of the man in a center towards another man in a hat. The image by Crewdson shows the look of exclamation from the mother. Winogrand’s image describe the congestion of people and life in the morning and how life is busy. (good description) The photograph by Winogrand was taken in black and white, its focus is on the man in the center. Crewdson’s image describes American life of quiet urban neighborhoods, the  photographer takes a picture of the place with expressive colors describing the lives of Americans (in rural suburbia in the northeast – not everywhere). The focus of the picture is leading the eye of the viewer through all the details. (to what effect? don’t leave us hanging!)

Garry  Winogrand

       He is street photographer and he documented the city and the urban landscape, in these images he is concentrating on the unusual people in the city. (Who is unusual in the above image? unusual in what way? He is no Diane Arbus, s please explain what you mean by this).

He described the people in the city and how they look when they walk in the street. He captured the beautiful and strange expressions on people’s faces and their side looks. (What is the overarching theme here? what does he teach you about human nature in his photographs?) Their stories are decidedly left unfinished. (This is a Sontagian concept that you do not touch on but you allude to. I wish you could have made this connection yourself.  “Photographs hide more than they reveal.”

1. “The photograph is both a piece of time and space. By including or excluding things its arbitrary borders both create and break relationships. Social reality is presented as small discontinuous particles.”

2. “Photographs can only give us knowledge of the world if we accept the world as we see it – photographs have a use in giving us mental pictures of things but they always hide more than they reveal. Only that which narrates can make us understand.”

 The picture shows the normal life of people in the city and the time and place and how each person carries a different life. This is generic and doesn’t make sense. Must be more connected to your main idea and much more specific.

Gregory Crewdson

    He is an American artist renowned for his elaborately devised photographs of small-town life, that convey the secrets of of American life of the neighborhoods, (??? America is an enormous place. please be specific about the time and place he is talking about. It changes everything).  in this picture we can see a woman with her underwear outside of the home, and we see that it is a night time. {Please say more! Don’t leave us hanging. Complete the thought – what do you surmise is going on? What stories play out in your head form this image? what does it make you think about? go from the specific to the overarching)

The application of the ideas of what a reference to it Sontag

Image is affected by what is transmitted through the camera of the photographer and through his perception of the events, time and place. ?!??!?!?! This is gobbeldigook. All of them (who is them?) are living in the  America life in the fifties (are they really or is Crewdson playing with this era for a specific effect?) and has a different view or impression in the perception of the life around them .What we’re saying is just what that image contents and that what keeps the mystery behind . This paragraphs does not make sense. Please focus on the ideas presented and how they relate to Sontag’s concepts of photography.